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Trying too hard... or not trying at all?
Reviewed in the United States 🇺🇸 on July 27, 2022
A good story is art. It's something that can make you feel joy, grief, anger, really the full spectrum of emotion. The only thing this made me feel was vaguely queezy, like eating a bad microwave chimichanga. Oddly specific I know, but, hey I'm sure you know what I'm talking about.
The plot of this let's call it a book, was blatantly sexist and lacked a great deal of imagination in every single department. First we can debate whether harem novels are inherently sexist at a later date with internet trolls and all, but the notion of "debts" and the way the women of the free isles are written is sexist. If you can ignore the most basic premise of the book, however, it's still a poorly written story.
The spelling is atrocious, I lost count after 15 words were mangled and that was pretty early in the book. The characters are so one dimensional they may as well be actual dwarings of hot anime characters with little else. Their dialogue is so bad that I actually just stopped reading it halfway through the book, skipping most of what they said because it really was just filler. That is because of how they were written.
Then we come to the actual plot... it's trying so hard to be an action packed fantasy novel that it skips so much of the build up. In many ways its like this is the second novel and we the readers must play catch up in Torr's world of madness.
Very little makes sense and that again is not due to this being particularly complex, but rather poor choices on the part of the author. The whole Aegid plotline makes no sense, half of the book the characters are on the run but we don't really know why until the last few chapters. Yes, elves are trying to capture or kill them but why is the invasion happening? We could do with a little more about Pryvet the mc too. We know the very basics but all in all this book is a bit of a mess. I'm leaving a 5 star review not to be a well... insert the negative word of choice there, but compared to a regular novel this is a 1.5/10 if we talk about most harem novels and use only those as a reference then it's a solid 1/5.
Maybe I've gotten picky but I like a real plot. I like women who have more to say. I like knowing a but more than about an mc. And I certainly like to hear more than just dirty jokes about the size of the thing hanging between the mcs legs every few chapters.
Regardless, I'll still probably read the series to completion just to see if the writing gets any better. Though, I really don't hold much hope for that. Hope I helped you make a decision, but it's up to you. I'm still not sure if this book was trying to hard to be something it's not, or if the author didn't try hard enough.